70. Cloud Burst


Review of Cloud Burst

Summary

Cloud Burst is a tender and emotionally rich poem that explores the intense vulnerability and quiet hope of one soul reaching out to be seen. Written with lyrical sensitivity and depth, it evokes the emotional weight of waiting — whether that’s a lover longing for connection, or equally, a child longing for the recognition of a parent. With imagery drawn from nature’s drama — cloudbursts, storm clouds, rainbows — the poem traces the journey from internal emotional weather to the joyful moment of being seen.

Why This Poem Matters

The emotional landscape of the poem begins in a place of uncertainty and tension:

“You look up from behind a blind gaze / Where grey thoughts do battle / Like dark clouds gathering”

Here, the “you” could just as easily be a parent consumed by adult concerns, too distracted or overwhelmed to notice the presence or emotional needs of the child before them. The storm of the adult mind — full of worry, rumination, and unresolved emotional patterns — creates a sense of distance that the speaker is keenly aware of.

The inner world of the speaker, meanwhile, is charged with silent longing and imagination:

“I long to see the cloudburst’s gleam / For in my head we are already dancing, laughing / In a parallel world that doesn’t yet exist”

This “parallel world” is particularly poignant from a child’s point of view — an imagined space where the parent is emotionally available, joyful, playful, and present. The sadness lies in its absence, yet the hope lies in its possibility. This imagined connection is what carries the child emotionally through the distance.

The line:

“Unspoken desires hang in the air bristling with speculation”

takes on a heart-wrenching new shade when read through the lens of a child. These “unspoken desires” could be as simple, and as essential, as “see me,” “hold me,” or “smile at me.”

The shift begins when the child feels something shift — a glimpse of reassurance, presence, love:

“Your gentle strength supports my vulnerability / So that in a world of shifting sand and shadow / My doubts do not destroy me”

This could be interpreted as the moment when a parent finally makes emotional contact — perhaps not even through words, but through a gesture, an expression, a look. In a world that can often feel chaotic or uncertain, the child’s stability is anchored in that presence.

And finally, we arrive at the emotional climax of the poem:

“I catch your gaze, you see me, a smile / Like a rainbow in the sky / Joy, my heart dances.”

This is the cloudburst. Not destructive, but cathartic — a longed-for recognition that arrives suddenly, restoring joy and affirming emotional existence. It could be a parent finally looking up, finally seeing, finally smiling — and for the child, that is everything. It’s the difference between being invisible and being real. The metaphor of the “rainbow in the sky” captures both the beauty and the rarety of the moment.

In Conclusion

Cloud Burst is a luminous, emotionally intelligent poem that touches on the universal longing to be seen, recognised, and emotionally met. Whether read as the inner landscape of a romantic connection or through the lens of a child yearning for parental connection, its impact remains the same: a testament to the power of presence and the joy that can erupt from a simple, heartfelt smile.

It reminds us that love often resides in the smallest gestures — the glance, the smile, the moment of genuine attention — and that these moments, though fleeting, can transform storms of doubt into dances of joy.

In a world where so many feel unseen or unheard, Cloud Burst becomes a quiet anthem for visibility, connection, and emotional resonance — a reminder of how vital it is to truly look at one another and see.


63. Shadow


Review of Shadow

Wednesday 4th January 2012

Summary

In Shadow, the poet turns inward to confront a darker facet of human relationships — where love has decayed into resentment and admiration into envy. This is a piece about nemesis energy, but with nuance: the speaker recognizes that the adversary in question may once have been a friend, or even a lover. Now transformed, their lingering attachment festers into sabotage. But the poem does not dwell in bitterness; it ultimately points to a higher road — spiritual alignment and liberation through surrender.

Why This Poem Matters

This poem expertly navigates a complex emotional terrain — what happens when someone who once loved us becomes a source of obstruction or pain. The power here is in the poet’s empathic detachment, able to observe the antagonist without slipping into the same drama.

Right from the start, the emotional paradox is stated:

“It’s most likely that your nemesis / Was once someone who loved you dearly / But now they love you darkly”

The use of “love you darkly” is chilling, precise. It acknowledges that obsession and control are not absence of feeling — they’re a distorted form of connection. The poem doesn’t label the enemy as monstrous, but as someone entangled, emotionally regressed, unable to release their hold.

“To destroy one’s reputation / Prevent one from reaching one’s goal / For sweet revenge is what they seek”

Here the poem reveals what drives the antagonist — a craving for emotional leverage. But again, the poet quickly pierces through the short-term triumph with insight:

“A short-term payoff / For an instant gratification peak / But the long-term cost / Is permanent excommunication”

The spiritual consequences are laid bare. By giving in to revenge, this figure risks cutting themselves off — not just from the speaker, but from their own inner peace, their own worth. That phrase, “permanent excommunication from the acknowledgement most desired”, is one of the most powerful lines in the poem — evoking a kind of spiritual orphaning.

Then comes a sharp turn inward:

“A self-perpetuating cycle / Round and round, stuck-in-a-rut / Evidencing an inability to rise / Above the quagmire of the ego”

There’s real compassion here. The cycle is not painted as evil, but pitiful, even tragic. The “quagmire of the ego” traps both parties — unless someone chooses to break the pattern. The poet does.

“The only solution is to realign / With the omnipresent divine”

The tone rises, almost like an exhale after holding one’s breath. In the face of malice, we are reminded of an ancient spiritual law: do not fight the shadow with shadow. Instead, turn to the light. Here, that light is described as:

“The unconditional ‘Presence of Love’”

And in a final, revelatory line, the poem explains that unconditional love is not just a platitude or romantic ideal — it’s something harder, truer:

“Love without conditions, attachments, or, strings.”

This is a redefinition of power. True power, the poem teaches, is not about influence over others — but about letting go, resisting the gravitational pull of old patterns, and remaining centred in your own sovereignty.

Metaphysical Depth & Imagery

The poem’s metaphysics is grounded in karma, ego, and divine realignment. The enemy figure is not a demon but a spiritually fallen being, held in place by unresolved emotions. The speaker’s path is to disengage — not in hatred, but in clarity.

The metaphor of the swamp is especially well-chosen:

“For like in a swamp / Resistance and struggle is futile”

This calls to mind the emotional quicksand that such toxic entanglements create. The more you struggle, the more you sink. The solution is not confrontation, but elevation — a subtle but profound insight.

And the final imagery of love without strings functions as both a revelation and a release — echoing ancient mystical teachings of non-attachment.

In Conclusion

Shadow is a quietly devastating poem — not because it rails against betrayal, but because it sees it so clearly and chooses peace over retaliation. It’s a poem for anyone who has wrestled with the heartbreak of betrayal and the temptation of revenge — and instead turned inward, upward, toward grace.

In this way, the poet once again shows their capacity to speak to the shared human condition — not with judgement, but with insight and spiritual intelligence. This is healing literature, poetic soul work. And a reminder that sometimes, walking away is the most radical act of love.