70. Cloud Burst


Review of Cloud Burst

Summary

Cloud Burst is a tender and emotionally rich poem that explores the intense vulnerability and quiet hope of one soul reaching out to be seen. Written with lyrical sensitivity and depth, it evokes the emotional weight of waiting — whether that’s a lover longing for connection, or equally, a child longing for the recognition of a parent. With imagery drawn from nature’s drama — cloudbursts, storm clouds, rainbows — the poem traces the journey from internal emotional weather to the joyful moment of being seen.

Why This Poem Matters

The emotional landscape of the poem begins in a place of uncertainty and tension:

“You look up from behind a blind gaze / Where grey thoughts do battle / Like dark clouds gathering”

Here, the “you” could just as easily be a parent consumed by adult concerns, too distracted or overwhelmed to notice the presence or emotional needs of the child before them. The storm of the adult mind — full of worry, rumination, and unresolved emotional patterns — creates a sense of distance that the speaker is keenly aware of.

The inner world of the speaker, meanwhile, is charged with silent longing and imagination:

“I long to see the cloudburst’s gleam / For in my head we are already dancing, laughing / In a parallel world that doesn’t yet exist”

This “parallel world” is particularly poignant from a child’s point of view — an imagined space where the parent is emotionally available, joyful, playful, and present. The sadness lies in its absence, yet the hope lies in its possibility. This imagined connection is what carries the child emotionally through the distance.

The line:

“Unspoken desires hang in the air bristling with speculation”

takes on a heart-wrenching new shade when read through the lens of a child. These “unspoken desires” could be as simple, and as essential, as “see me,” “hold me,” or “smile at me.”

The shift begins when the child feels something shift — a glimpse of reassurance, presence, love:

“Your gentle strength supports my vulnerability / So that in a world of shifting sand and shadow / My doubts do not destroy me”

This could be interpreted as the moment when a parent finally makes emotional contact — perhaps not even through words, but through a gesture, an expression, a look. In a world that can often feel chaotic or uncertain, the child’s stability is anchored in that presence.

And finally, we arrive at the emotional climax of the poem:

“I catch your gaze, you see me, a smile / Like a rainbow in the sky / Joy, my heart dances.”

This is the cloudburst. Not destructive, but cathartic — a longed-for recognition that arrives suddenly, restoring joy and affirming emotional existence. It could be a parent finally looking up, finally seeing, finally smiling — and for the child, that is everything. It’s the difference between being invisible and being real. The metaphor of the “rainbow in the sky” captures both the beauty and the rarety of the moment.

In Conclusion

Cloud Burst is a luminous, emotionally intelligent poem that touches on the universal longing to be seen, recognised, and emotionally met. Whether read as the inner landscape of a romantic connection or through the lens of a child yearning for parental connection, its impact remains the same: a testament to the power of presence and the joy that can erupt from a simple, heartfelt smile.

It reminds us that love often resides in the smallest gestures — the glance, the smile, the moment of genuine attention — and that these moments, though fleeting, can transform storms of doubt into dances of joy.

In a world where so many feel unseen or unheard, Cloud Burst becomes a quiet anthem for visibility, connection, and emotional resonance — a reminder of how vital it is to truly look at one another and see.


✩ 38. Swim – Tate Britain


Come swim with me

Dive into my smile

Dance for a while

Allow yourself to be free…




Can’t you see

What you’re doing to me?

Stop, turn-around now and let go

Jump into the current

Go with the flow

Sweeping along effortlessly

Carries afloat…

Breathe calm and slow

Inhale the sweet taste

Of this present moment

Open your heart and fly!

Don’t waste precious time

Wondering why?



Feel real, right now!

Before it’s too late…

Before love fades

Pales into the dusty haze

Another faint sweet memory

Lost in the forgotten maze

Labyrinth of time

Washed away

By the undulating waves

Is but a moment, a droplet

In the ocean-of-eternity

Sea of doubt

Emotional tides of uncertainty

Enduring bondage of the mind…



Come swim with me

Dive into my smile

Dance for a while

Allow yourself to be free…


Review of “Swim” (Friday 4th February 2005)

“Swim” is an invitation — tender, urgent, and poetic — calling the reader into emotional surrender and present-moment awareness. Framed through the sensual imagery of water, movement, and breath, the poem becomes a metaphor for mindfulness: “Breathe calm and slow / Inhale the sweet taste / Of this present moment.”

The author juxtaposes the simplicity of joy — found in dancing, smiling, and being — with the melancholy reality of time’s passing. The fluidity of love and memory is reflected in the lines “Washed away / By the undulating waves,” reminding us that moments not fully lived may dissolve into forgetfulness. This is not just a romantic yearning, but a deeper call to presence — to “feel real, right now,” before life’s emotional tides carry us elsewhere.

The gentle refrain “Come swim with me / Dive into my smile” acts as both an invitation to love and a spiritual urging to return to now — where joy, connection, and freedom reside.

Summary:
“Swim” is more than a love poem — it is a meditation on impermanence and the importance of anchoring oneself in the present. The author uses water as a guiding symbol of emotional and spiritual flow, encouraging the release of resistance and the full embrace of what is.

Conclusion:
At once intimate and expansive, “Swim” reminds us that presence is the gateway to love, freedom, and self-realisation. This poem shimmers with quiet urgency — a soft, flowing wake-up call to live fully, now. ✩


This poem was written in 2005. In 2006/07 Swim was featured on a fundraising Compilation LP for Campaign Against Arms Trading, (CAAT) engineered by Oli Widdaker @ Blue Flower Studios. In November of 2008, I was invited to be a guest speaker for Late at Tate, at the screening of my Poetry Film for Swim (below). Swim is now in 2025 Swim is an uplifting dance / house track on my debut EP available from bandcamp.

✩ 35. W.L.T.M. G.S.O.H.


WLTM GSOH invites a return to innocence, reminding us that spiritual depth need not always be solemn. In fact, humour and joy are often some of the highest forms of intelligence. This poem, now song, reflects a universal longing to be understood and met fully: intellectually, emotionally, and energetically; a partner in emotional evolution.

magic-carpet-ride
Artist- unknown

Artist, visionary, dreamer

Seeks team player, sometimes leader

To share emotional intelligence, cosmic conversation

Wine, dine, dance, animation

Hug, snug, two peas in a pod, two bugs in a rug

Two happy fat cats, sat on a mat, magic carpet, float

On and out to sea, the Sea of Love

Like the owl and the pussycat and one white dove

In a beautiful pea green boat.


Review of W.L.T.M. — G.S.O.H. (Sunday 8th February 2004)

This poem is light, playful, and endearingly whimsical — a lyrical personal ad from the soul, dressed in poetic form. The title, styled in classic dating column shorthand — “Would Like To Meet — Good Sense of Humour” — immediately sets the tone: candid, quirky, and hopeful.

It opens with self-definition:

“Artist, visionary, dreamer / Seeks team player / Sometimes leader”
The lines are simple but layered, outlining a desire for a companion who matches not only in ambition or intellect but in spirit — someone who is equally attuned to the emotional and cosmic layers of life.

There’s a natural rhythm and bounce throughout the poem — a gentle swing between romantic idealism and charming humour. This is especially vivid in the central imagery:

“Two peas-in-a-pod / Two bugs-in-a-rug / Two happy-fat-cats / Sat on a mat…”
The sing-song tone and childlike comparisons evoke comfort, closeness, and fun — not just romantic love, but true companionship.

Then, the poem lifts off into a soft, dreamy closing sequence:

“Magic carpet, float / On and out to sea / The Sea of Love”
— where the earthly whimsy dissolves into a more symbolic journey, reminiscent of The Owl and the Pussycat (cleverly referenced directly), with a white dove sealing the vision with a note of peace, purity, and hope.


Conclusion

W.L.T.M. — G.S.O.H. is a sweet and imaginative portrait of the longing for love — not just any love, but a deep, soulful connection built on laughter, understanding, and shared dreaming. Full of wordplay and gentle metaphor, the poem feels like a poetic dating profile that transcends cliché by speaking from a place of authentic desire and joy.